Chapter 80: Written before the launch

I originally planned to do a monthly summary, but after thinking about it, let's put it off until later.

First, let's talk about some problems with this book. Some readers mentioned that the plot development is too slow. Why drag it out so long for what is clearly a very simple matter?

Actually, I think this is not deliberately dragging it out or a new trick I'm doing on purpose; the development thread of the story is just like this.

I hope to present a relatively more real world, rather than a story with a plot every three or five chapters.

There are many such fast-food stories elsewhere, and they are basically finished at 200,000 words. When you look back and want to think about what you have read, you are very likely unable to remember what this book actually wrote.

I personally think that for a good story, at least the world, the society where the story happens, including the era it happens in, should be full and three-dimensional.

I could write in the first chapter that Lanse was treated by Jonny, in the second chapter find a way to give him a hit, in the third chapter encounter other unhappy things, and in the fourth chapter give someone else a hit.

This is not a story.

A story has ups and downs; it develops naturally.

A poor kid in the morning, and the system gives 10 billion in the afternoon, and then living the life of a nouveau riche—this is not what I want.

There are also some readers who think that a part of the plot is obviously unreasonable, such as the problem that Qiaobafu keeps retreating in the face of various extortions and dares not resist.

Actually, don't ask me about this problem; go look at the news and ask those who are experiencing these things why they don't resist?

They are being extorted for billions today and billions tomorrow; why don't they leave, run, or retaliate?

According to your saying, they have more money and more influence; why are they still willing to be extorted?

Could it be that they have colluded just to act for you?

Don't imagine a country like the Federation as too perfect; they are cold, barbaric, and cruel to the bone.

Over here, Qiaobafu leaves some clues about gangs or hired killers, and over there, they can make him die without a burial place.

It's not because he broke the law, but because he tried to resist, tried to resist the control from the "orthodox."

Forcible seizure has always been their habit. Now they don't deal with him more fiercely, just because they think that for the time being, putting the money in his pocket, he won't resist.

When someone needs it, they will come to the door like Yase, giving him a reason he cannot refuse.

As long as he resists, he will die very ugly.

Then there is the problem of private goods. I think that for every author or writer, the story written is essentially a manifestation of their own cognition of the world. It is very normal to have private goods.

But being able to see at a glance that there are private goods and then criticize and oppose them—that is not my problem.

Some readers who are particularly disgusted with private goods should seriously reflect on why you are so strongly disgusted and calculating about some of my descriptions of social values in the book???

When I type three question marks, it is definitely not my problem!

Next is the problem of usury. Some readers asked, why don't these people go to the bank for loans?

How should I put this?

They probably haven't taken out a loan from a bank. For the lower class and the propertyless, they won't give you a loan so simply. If you have understood or experienced it, you will understand how strict these audits are and how high the actual interest rate is!

Of course, most people don't actually understand this. On one hand, they don't want to understand, and on the other hand, they have no chance to understand, and then they asked me this question: why not look for a bank.

Now I tell you, because the bank won't lend them money. This is also the reason why usury still exists in developed countries even now.

As for whether the interest rate is high or not?

I can only say that I have already written it on the low side, because some data is so exaggerated that I feel those people are writing randomly.

The next question: why does Lanse's sense of participation in the story seem insufficient now, and most of it is other people's stories?

This actually depends on the writing method of this book: is it character-driven or plot-driven?

Two obvious examples: One Piece is a typical character-driven plot; the main push of the plot is not what others did, but what the protagonist did again.

And the other one is Naruto, where everyone is doing certain things, pushing the protagonist to follow an invisible line and run forward.

Of course, this is just an example, not necessarily all correct, but it is roughly like this.

It is hard to say which of these two writing methods is better, but I lean toward plot-driven characters, plus my habitual hiding of private goods and watering down supporting characters and social background, the story and characters themselves will become fuller, at least I think it will look better.

Now the story thread itself has just started, and there are not many events the protagonist can participate in, so he will appear relatively less.

With the development of the story, there will be more and more plots related to the protagonist, and his screen time and sense of participation will become stronger.

As for the problem of "coincidence," it is that there is no coincidence without a story. As long as this coincidence conforms to the development of the story and is logical, I think it is reasonable.

Even the Great Archmage Liu Xiu is reasonable, so there is no reason why these reasonable plots of mine are unreasonable.

Today someone put forward a point of view that the protagonist's current solutions are all tit-for-tat and violence-for-violence, lacking the pleasure of power strategy.

I am considering it this way: if an ordinary freelancer is now owed wages, and the other party is a big boss, please use some power strategy to make this big boss stumble because of your planning, and then kneel in front of you, holding the thousands of owed wages high with both hands, begging you to accept it and spare him—let me learn.

Maybe I can also write this kind of bottom-level power strategy, making people realize that I can't write it because I have seen too little.

Workers only need to do physical work; only bosses consider the company's interests and consider business war problems.

There is also an old reader who asked, tens of thousands of bottles of wine, and only 2 people guarding them.

I said in the book that the workers were all dismissed. Originally it wasn't 2 people, but now because they need to be handed over, and it is just a front-and-back hand, so they were dismissed.

Someone in front said that the protagonist's development is too smooth, and he can meet noble people easily, borrowing money and solving problems.

Honestly, if you download an xx loan now, you can also meet noble people. They can give you a large sum of money without even seeing your face. Are you saying you are not the son of destiny?

When you tell me that lending you money at usury is a noble person, do you know how long this has occupied my laughter?

This loan was not directly wiped out by Alberto. Lanse recovered two debts for him, and he wiped it out for Lanse. In other words, Lanse also paid, and Anderson was not easy to deal with.

Some readers raised a question, thinking that the protagonist's starting means are not on the table. I didn't want to say anything about this problem, but I have to say something.

There are too many people who started by cheating. If everyone had moral cleanliness, this world would have been unified long ago.

Some readers said the process of assassinating Jimi was overly dumbed down, but in fact, I think not at all, because someone just proved that marksmanship is not easy to practice.

Let's not discuss whether the number of bullets consumed and the number of deaths in each war is reasonable. Just shooting at a target, this kind of high-precision pistol should be a hundred hits in a stable environment, right?

But we still know what the result is.

Maybe some people say, this is too far.

There are many distances in the book. If you have friends who have fired guns, ask them, within ten to twenty meters, both themselves and the target are moving, and there is traffic flow affecting the shooting, can they hit the target every time?

Baidu tells me that at a distance of fifteen meters, the deviation caused by a 1-degree angle difference is 4.17cm. In other words, even a very small deviation will result in not hitting the vital point.

We are always "I think," which is wrong. Perhaps I should write that he hit Jimi's eye socket from five kilometers away with a semi-automatic pistol with an effective range of only eighty meters and blew his brain—that would be more reasonable.

Basically, these are the recent problems. If there is anything that needs to be discussed, or you want me to answer, long press the 1 at the end of this line and leave your speech to challenge my and the book friends' IQ 1.

You will see the answer next month.

When you see this chapter, its activity period is before August 3, 2024. If the time you leave a message is past this time point, I am sorry I may not see it.

However, you can go to the latest monthly summary to ask questions.

In addition, thanks to the editor and editor-in-chief for their guidance and care, and wish myself a happy launch.

1: Here is also fine. ===== CHAPTER 81 =====